One Scary Copywriting Tip

Creating Content / Visual Design

I remember reading this advice in my journey to writing great …

[quote]Cut your copy in half. Then cut it in half again.[/quote]

Wow! That’s pretty scary.

It seems hard enough to simply get some good words down on paper. Now, I’m asking you to cut it in half?! Twice?! Yikes!!

Recently, I updated a section of content on my About page in an attempt to apply this advice.

Let me show you three iterations of the content and how it turned out. I think you’ll love it.

Here’s the first write-up, with paragraphs of about 4-5 lines each …


write-up 1


Then, I cut it in half, which feels about 1/3 less …


2


And here’s the third version, which I forced down to 2 lines each …


3

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Better? Most agree. A few liked the second version better.

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So, do you like the chop-chop approach? Hit Like and comment below. 

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12 Comments

  1. I believe that you would not be considered verbose if you use the first cut. It seems more conversational and friendly. It’s not too long. I will definitely use this advice when I tackle my own About Me page this week.

  2. Great example. Often people just quote these ideas over and over but your personal examples are powerful. Thanks!
    When I taught grade school,I used to have a poster in my class with someone hugging their writing and the caption said “Don’t fall in love with your first draft.” Good advice.??

  3. Hi Kenn,

    I actually think that the best version is the second one.
    It has many advantages, and not tiring to read.